There is a lot going on in this poem, and I was unable to create a title I was satisfied with. However, it is kind of fun to hear what other people think, so please make title suggestions!
I fall asleep, a ladle into seas,
the heavy ‘tween dreams the steam
inspiring my delusions.
And all the building, twisted towers
mounting to gifts of the world’s elite:
recognition, wealth, and death.
But dreams are not but devastations
of all these worldly aspirations,
distracting my spirit from home.
So I’ve restated my claim to
amputate my Self from the mainland
reign, and to balance so unreasonably
on the vein of one leaf
at the highest tree’s peak, and risk
falling for flight.
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Title suggestions:
Treasure in earthen vessels
Given over to death
What is unseen is eternal
The inward man is renewed
dying to delusions
falling, flight
distracting my spirit
refugee to the world
Do you ever use part of your poem as the title? If you did you might use
a ladle into seas
risk
Falling for flight
some ideas I was playing with
Melody-- alien melody
Alien
some title's, words for titles I was playing with
Forgein air
Blow in
canticle
Restated Claim
Heavenly strain
Migrant madrigal
Paean
now I must return to painting!
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